(attempt 1)
Your teenagers work while they go to school first of all me myself I did work while I'm going to school in my other lesson time I selling some stuff to get more money for my daily life it's not because I am needed but I want some thing to buy so I need more money not just from my parents so I totally agree with the statement that in adolescent's time we have to train our kids or our children to do some work to train their responsibility
(attempt 2)
Definitely I agree with the statement kids with adolescent time is really not stable time for them and for me myself I did work when I go to school and I just feel I more responsible than other students. because when you go to work either you have money or not you piggy bag a responsible that
(attempt 3)
Absolutely I have agreed with the statement in my personal experience I did work while I went to school and it just made me more responsible for other thing not only for school but also when I have passed from my parents and when I have a date with my friends I just got in time. so I suggest to all parents in the world to make students go to work either having money or not or get salary or not you just go or work it's good for your children
(attempt 4)
I totally agree with the statement because my own experience I did work while I am in adolescent time when I went to school and it really just made me more responsible than other students or my friend on top of that I have more money with my own work so I just feel so proud of me and I can about another things instead using my parents money. so for parents all over the world I suggest you to train your children to go work while they're in school age
Based on grammar, coherence, and fluency, I would say that Attempt 2 is the best result of your speaking TOEFL practice. This response is clear, concise, and effectively communicates your opinion on the topic. Your grammar and sentence structure are generally correct, and you use examples to support your argument. Additionally, your speech flows well and you sound confident and comfortable speaking in English.
Attempt 1 and Attempt 3 both have some grammar and coherence issues, which may make it harder for the listener to follow your ideas. Attempt 4 has some grammatical errors and lacks coherence in some parts.
Overall, Attempt 2 is the strongest response, but there is still room for improvement in terms of grammar and vocabulary. By continuing to practice and work on your English skills, you can further improve your speaking ability and achieve your goals.
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